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The Negro (Free verse) by Everyone

He toils; Gnarled hands grope the tilth, Baked-black hide caked in filth: He's soiled. He bolts; O'er the fence, thro' Master's grounds, Straight into the waiting hounds: He halts. He wails; Bulging lips swell with rage, Thrashing limbs to break his cage: He fails. He stoops; White palms clenched about the bars, As Master's whip inflicts new scars: He droops. He toils; Gnarled hands grope the tilth, Baked-black hide caked in filth: He's soiled.

Fraser Allonby Q.C. 23-Apr-04/9:12 AM
He slouches;
When [his] Master's gone to bed,
He sneaks [away] [behind] the shed
And crouches.

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