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The Negro (Free verse) by Everyone

He toils; Gnarled hands grope the tilth, Baked-black hide caked in filth: He's soiled. He bolts; O'er the fence, thro' Master's grounds, Straight into the waiting hounds: He halts. He wails; Bulging lips swell with rage, Thrashing limbs to break his cage: He fails. He stoops; White palms clenched about the bars, As Master's whip inflicts new scars: He droops. He toils; Gnarled hands grope the tilth, Baked-black hide caked in filth: He's soiled.

Fraser Allonby Q.C. 22-Apr-04/1:22 AM
This is the best poem I have read for ages. Is this a collaborative effort? It's absolutely superb.

I admire the economy of language. SupremeDreamer should take note.

He travails;
His anfractuous metacarpals impinge upon the alluvium,
His cauterized and atramentous integument is begrimed with feculence:
He's besmirched.

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