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Diary entry (edit) (Free verse) by richa

The omens gather like clouds: A hefty wood pigeon lands on a maple, upsets the grin of a wet leaf, rain falls on my head-- she is beautiful the butterfly claps, earth puts forth its crooked mirror.

horus8 12-Apr-04/4:56 PM
Really to be frank and not Peter? Your last line Peters out, and that's why you have five 8's. People are being kind, but we all know what that means? It means your last line is poopy.




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