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Castaway (Other) by andrewjthomas

The flow of the sea is lost to men who are caught inside her storm. You sway with fear, still loathing nature's regret. The tempest surges, boat capsized in water's search for nooks and crannies. To blame her -- foolish, futile. Don't forget, precipitation falls on all who said the rain would never come. Certainties, like her, are no more truth than lies. What does denial beget? You'll drown while currents tear you asunder. Why this urge to swim against peace? She knows. ======================== note: this is an oscillitet, a form of my own creation rhyme and meter grow inward to a culminating heroic couplet also serving as the central thought for the piece feel free to try your hand at it and please let me know if you do

Stephen Robins 9-Feb-04/8:54 AM
I guess it all depends on how you define impressive and what scope you allow. If I interpret you correctly "impressive" in the context of this poem means poorly structured dull form that does not even stick to your own definition of the poem. If impressive also means making up gay names for aforementioned structure which is not adhered to then ythis clearly the most impressive jumble of asorted shite ever to have been laid down. However if impressive is to mean your rather girly way of responding and using * and >:@{ then you are sadly mistaken.




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