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Day of Reckoning (Free verse) by Lenore

Like a sickly sweet smell from the depths of hell; your vision in my mind implores me, to fashion a death so vile and base, no mercy or peace can find thee. A villanous state my thoughts in dwell; enraged by your indignant apathy. How well you disquise your selfish intent, while the stench of your truth proves brashly. The blatent deceit in which you repeat, those ghastly yet savvy deeds; ignite me to smite thee, though no perilous warning impedes. Onward in lashing! Pure rage in the bashing! Your terror reign, incomplete! Cut down from your thrown and left all alone, to lie bleeding and wrought with defeat.

horus8 12-Aug-02/6:35 PM
hi lenore...honey, you know i give two shits about spelling as long as you tried hard or were genuine, but on line 16 i'm positive you meant throne, love you.take care.fix it or not. i'll vote twice. i thought for a second it might work as thrown..then i was like naw...even i know better.loves again..be well..soft.swear.sugar.on.the.asphalt. great nasty poem it's what i call a 'puffer'. or if you like the violent femmes it's a "blister in the sun". "let me go on". "i hope you know that this will go down on your permanent record" finger up to the gods of revenge and lust and all that other glorious pilliging...go berzerk!w




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