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Malaysia (Free verse) by Crakyamuni

Mostly managed to chew the chum, misinterpreted nostalgia or dignity for some Elegant denizens of the fifth layer celibate, repent and send messages with a furor like sedatives disdain for the tenement left me empty and innocent but I felt so far away from my lovers and miscreants This is not fantasia, or south central asia, and how can I express the pulse of Malaysia? but as a wayward third word, twice past the oppression, repenting and venting the last one's trangressions

horus8 11-Jan-04/12:31 AM
Dude? It's not that bad! relax. I love casteneda but got very little from the last two lines. Consentrate, and relax and fix them. You'll do fine.




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