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Malaysia (Free verse) by Crakyamuni

Mostly managed to chew the chum, misinterpreted nostalgia or dignity for some Elegant denizens of the fifth layer celibate, repent and send messages with a furor like sedatives disdain for the tenement left me empty and innocent but I felt so far away from my lovers and miscreants This is not fantasia, or south central asia, and how can I express the pulse of Malaysia? but as a wayward third word, twice past the oppression, repenting and venting the last one's trangressions

horus8 10-Jan-04/6:46 PM
Jesus, your end chucks it? It was great until the last two lines? Do I have to teach you how to end a poem?




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