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Fake Happiness (Free verse) by WithoutLife

I look happy and joyful, But the look in my eyes shows pain. You hear a contagious laugh, But I sob in silence. The smell of my lotion fills the room, But it is to cover the scent of showering tears. Friends enjoy the sweet snacks of our get together, But numbness has seized my taste buds. I fool you with my warmth, But then you touch my ice cold hands. My secret is out

horus8 10-Jan-04/10:25 AM
Once, in the jungles of your asshole I battled the great beast 'Sumptin'. After severing its face from it's lower intestine I crawled out a new man, though wet and covered in smegma. So when you say "fuck my spelling" are you trying to take our focus off of you being a lazy retard, by convincing us that you make up for your lack of writing skills with 'feelings'? How do you expect to convey feelings to your audience of 0 if you can't even form the words to describe a feeling to fucking begin with? Perhaps, you'll send us all snap shots of you beating yourself into the shape of a poem with 'feelings' with a ten foot turd bat with your initials on the handle you nicknamed Beefer? Hack.




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