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Retirement (Free verse) by Jeremi B. Handrinos

Stumps with a barreness as far as the eyes could see High pitched whine followed by bloody curdling screams Not a hint of green, or life, or love, or daylight The Saw mill stands alone on a grey slate precipice No more men or bad jokes over black coffee & timecards The ghost of development now's automated by depravation The roof's covered by wingless sleeping birds, preening And ahead lies a suburbia fashioned from worker's flesh Water tower reads "Forest of Modernization", Hatesville Winnebagos Pontoons Jetskys Watercrafts Swimmingpools And filthy bird baths Audaciously uncentered between the mailbox & inevitability.

Jeremi B. Handrinos 4-Aug-03/3:03 PM
I still have yet to be defensive. I have not switched or hidden behind any characters. Intransit, hardly slobbered, he just found the poem funny and ironic for the same reason why you've come over puffing your chest no doubt. Which is why you're the most predictable lead source to water on poemranker. You never fail. And, I agree totally that my poetry could always use an edit or two or ten. Whos' doesn't? Your's? Why am I image challenged? And what exactly is my image? lol




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