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Retirement (Free verse) by Jeremi B. Handrinos

Stumps with a barreness as far as the eyes could see High pitched whine followed by bloody curdling screams Not a hint of green, or life, or love, or daylight The Saw mill stands alone on a grey slate precipice No more men or bad jokes over black coffee & timecards The ghost of development now's automated by depravation The roof's covered by wingless sleeping birds, preening And ahead lies a suburbia fashioned from worker's flesh Water tower reads "Forest of Modernization", Hatesville Winnebagos Pontoons Jetskys Watercrafts Swimmingpools And filthy bird baths Audaciously uncentered between the mailbox & inevitability.

Jeremi B. Handrinos 4-Aug-03/2:39 PM
Look at your imagination go. I'm impressed, but tell me since we both know smoking what has already been smoked is impossible. I'm left trying to piece together the point behind your comments and wit? Pray tell, does it explain everything? Or are you just throwing out a quick reason to high tail it out of here before the "inevitability" of me, making you, look stupid as usual comes limping to your rescue?




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