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I sat for an hour to watch a spider (Free verse) by Jimbo

July 26, 2003 ~ I sat for an hour to watch a spider ~ Daydreaming I suppose Staring out the window Thinking of something beautiful Suddenly something caught my eye A tiny spider dancing before my face ~ Up and down - side to side Back and forth it moved so swiftly I'd never sat to watch this before Swinging swiftly from end to end Arching its web ~ Gently draping silken threads So finely woven just barely visible The spider moved so quick It certainly had a mission Its threads to catch tonight's dinner maybe? ~ This tiny almost alien creature Building its home upon a window screen So intent on weaving its web I thought to myself just one swift breeze And it will be gone forever ~ I compared the web to a life I've known Working so diligently Caring loving and sharing Giving all that's possible Then suddenly under a small strain all can be gone ~ Thom

horus8 30-Jul-03/8:41 PM
Also, why post a poem if you cannot respond sensibly to a critique. I raised some striking issues to you about where your poetry is going bad, and you respond like a child. I offer structural suggestions and basically, give you your solution on a silver platter, and a formula to work with to improve your poetry since we share mutual friends, and you insult me and disrespect me, over your half assed heinous mutilation of arachnids? You're a fool. There are people that would pay good money to have me give them a creative boost and share some of my techniques. You should listen to better poets when they share advice, it's the only way to learn, not act like a oversensitive spoiled degenerate, for future reference. The poets life is no place for the sensitive & or the spoiled charity case, my friend, remember that if fucking anything I've said. You can burn that one to your pink little brain old man.




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