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I sat for an hour to watch a spider (Free verse) by Jimbo

July 26, 2003 ~ I sat for an hour to watch a spider ~ Daydreaming I suppose Staring out the window Thinking of something beautiful Suddenly something caught my eye A tiny spider dancing before my face ~ Up and down - side to side Back and forth it moved so swiftly I'd never sat to watch this before Swinging swiftly from end to end Arching its web ~ Gently draping silken threads So finely woven just barely visible The spider moved so quick It certainly had a mission Its threads to catch tonight's dinner maybe? ~ This tiny almost alien creature Building its home upon a window screen So intent on weaving its web I thought to myself just one swift breeze And it will be gone forever ~ I compared the web to a life I've known Working so diligently Caring loving and sharing Giving all that's possible Then suddenly under a small strain all can be gone ~ Thom

horus8 30-Jul-03/8:27 PM
I know how to spell 'critique' my good man, and how to spell check, but as you can tell I did not deem it neccessary in my comment to you. Since, yo don't deem it justified to put poetry into your poems. Can you spell 'the special olympics fot the poetically challenged'? Here, allow me, it's 'BITTER OLD MAN WITH A SHIT BAG RACING FOR THE TRUTH'. Sorry about that, phew... Is my bow tie okay?




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