horus830 Jul 2003

1. what does dew smell like? Precisely
2. Do you ever get the feeling that you're losing your grasp on the difference between too, and to, and two?
3."When I wake up in your bed
I know I have been dreaming".
probably the most uninteresting observation I've ever had the disservice of witnessing. Congratulation. Somehow I get the feeling you're just a tiger in the sack, grrrrr. lol.
[some number I've forgotten between 1 and 10 oh, 4.]"As the light collided with walls
Hurting and cutting me deep" Jesus homer are you onto some bulbs we're all missing? just maybe.
5. "But tonight the sky is dark" Another brilliant observation. You would be a great babysitter you could be like "well, the child was young and small"? well yeah?
6."And I had kissed you with my eyes
Holding you tightly with my breath" David Copperfield, I will have you know, is cackeling at you, along with me, Jesus, The Devil, Carl Jung, and Castro(?). In other words, Thom, you could make Hallmark cry, but please spare me the trouble of making you cry, by belittling your most inappropriate attempts at poetry I've seen in weeks. Enjoy this and put it over your mantel.

'THEE MOST HONORABLE AWARD OF MERIT IN THE ART OF BEING INCONCEIVABLY REDUNDANT WITH EXTRAORDINARY GLEE IS BEQUEETHED UPON THEE AND YOU'S AND YOURS'

Be blessed sir, there's a poet in you somewhere. Perhaps you should go watch hamburger hill and get those juices flowing, because sir, your poem was shat.