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Yellow Star (Free verse) by Mr Pig

Yellow stars in a pit of faces, Staring transfixed from their tomb, At their possessions neatly stacked by ‘perfect mortals’ Suitcases aligned outside the shower room, Emblazoned in names or chalk epitaphs, That stands beside a leather mountain of heels. The drone of a single shaver, Removing the perfect hair, That will be used for textiles to seam more yellow stars, The sick irony of death bearing death, And the whooping cough of a typhoid stricken child, Walking with her mother mild, To the room of no return. In the shower room I sit half a century on, Thinking of the nameless gone, In this room I recall the Mothers, Who would try to help their babies breathe By making them suckle on desperate nipples, Both dying in the shape that they lived in the womb, Where screams turned to smoke that would bellow for hours, I break down in the shower room. I remain haunted by the corrugated corridors, The squeak and lingering echo of recycled boots on shiny floors, Where laughing Nazis would walk to block 11, To purify Jews by liquid suffocation, I see a name carved in to granite, Next to rows of seven stripes until the abrupt end, Continued on to a whole wall, These are horrors I can never comprehend, It leaves me sore, From my one single day in Sobibor.

horus8 22-Jul-03/2:37 PM
3) I live in A Jewish neighborhood, i am my next door neighbors shabbas goy, I am not jewish, but all of my dearest friend are, and my mentor is David Weismen. My agent Robert Abrahms (jew) my manager didi binder (jew), but was that my point? That I have something against Jews? I don't, but I'm not afraid to tell them what I think either, it doesn't mean I'm a nazi. I believe both sides were wrong, and also that America and some others put these balls in motion with the treaty of Versailles. Aryans are not racists, their name was stolen and used inappropriately, once again they were a peaceful steppe people 5,000 years ago, but when you take a moron and give him an occult book he can't understand? Weird shit can happen. My pathetic defense of History is not pathetic, or a defense, I just enjoy pushing stereotypes until they break. I am taoist by heart and feel that hating any team that your favourite team is playing? Is an unevolving 360 degree trap. We should not blame the German people, or Hitler, or Nazis. We should blame our own inability to maintain a grasp on reality when we win the lottery, or are informed we are dying. But some can't maintain, they snap, go out and kill their coworkers. Or (in the case of winning) spend the money on ridiculous shit until broke or dead for a life of what ifs. It's your classic example of a child seeing how far they can push a parent until no. Hitler was a psychotic just begging for attention and to be told no. If it wasn't the Jews it would have been someone else. When a psychopath is surrounded by enablers, money, fear, and people waiting on every word they utter. They become a time bomb, and when they get that first taste of superstar applause? Look out!

4) I am not conceited, I'm just more aware than your normal Joe, and I wouldn't torture anything, being a survivor of torture myself. To become that would be my worst nightmare.
i am debating the fact that your poem doesn't include anyone else but the Jews and the Nazis black and white, if you would of had an italian girl singing to cheer them up before dying, or a gypsy still hustling incarcerated it would have been contrasted and brought humor and hope to an impossible situation, and show your audience that you're not just writing this because everyone will give it tens out of guilt.




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