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Yellow Star (Free verse) by Mr Pig

Yellow stars in a pit of faces, Staring transfixed from their tomb, At their possessions neatly stacked by ‘perfect mortals’ Suitcases aligned outside the shower room, Emblazoned in names or chalk epitaphs, That stands beside a leather mountain of heels. The drone of a single shaver, Removing the perfect hair, That will be used for textiles to seam more yellow stars, The sick irony of death bearing death, And the whooping cough of a typhoid stricken child, Walking with her mother mild, To the room of no return. In the shower room I sit half a century on, Thinking of the nameless gone, In this room I recall the Mothers, Who would try to help their babies breathe By making them suckle on desperate nipples, Both dying in the shape that they lived in the womb, Where screams turned to smoke that would bellow for hours, I break down in the shower room. I remain haunted by the corrugated corridors, The squeak and lingering echo of recycled boots on shiny floors, Where laughing Nazis would walk to block 11, To purify Jews by liquid suffocation, I see a name carved in to granite, Next to rows of seven stripes until the abrupt end, Continued on to a whole wall, These are horrors I can never comprehend, It leaves me sore, From my one single day in Sobibor.

horus8 21-Jul-03/12:09 PM
Well, one thing for sure, you sure know how to cater your pieces to the best list! Next, perhaps, do one on the struggles of the neanderthal before they were exterminated, or, how about the chinese in California? Sure, then, you could occupy every single slot on the top poemranker countdown along with the rest of the poet hacks. ten movies a year come out in the jewish controled movie industry telling this same story a million times better over and over again. Yet, do they, 'the jews' take the time to explore other races struggles? No, not in the least, because they only give a fuck about themselves. Oh, hey lets do another tired movie on world war two? what about the palestinians? What about the genocides in Africa or south America, sweat shops, child labor, but no, another fucking Jewish blee on jewish blow blee blah blue. Whatever. Jews only look after themselves, and I'm fucking sick of it, I'm not saying the nazis were right or that the Jews didn't suffer, but I can name thousands of shit (currentevents) that's just as important to be aware of get lost underneath the much more important plight of the Jews (since they own the media)... But alas I'm sure you can add it to your control of the board mr pig, but personally, I thought it was poorly written, and to an average kid into poetry, it's incomprehendible anyway. I hope it goes to #1. Good day.




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