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Thorns (Free verse) by poetandknowit

Nothing is spoken. The door is simply shut. The television gasping for clarity is switched off, allowing the room to offer itself to moonlight. Breathing seems amplified, air cold and indifferent and all matter lay dead in the shifting darkness. We are equal in blackness. Shadows separate across the bed reaching for trousers and nightgown, the clumsy religion of cowering to cover what is not concealed. I could say something, that is my right but they did not expect me so soon and there are things they need to talk about. So I open the door take a last look at the living room furniture, the Titian imitation on the wall and leave my house.

scitz 17-Jun-03/9:36 AM
Thought this was brilliant, I love line 2 its original. Your an interesting character I either love your stuff or hate it and you've said a couple of negative things about me in the past but fuck it we don't have to like each other.
I feel I am improving as a writer, more experimental and I believe you must selectively read the good and ignore the bad and let it inspire you.

What about you ?
By the way my brother's gone AWOL last I heard he was state side.

Great poem - seriously.

a rare 10




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