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Sweet, Sweet... Daddy (Villanelle) by Jeremi B. Handrinos

Mr. Man, is serving detention I can't fit my face through his bars An angry man needs attention. Mrs. Man claims it's prevention Making that nigger hide his scars Mr. Man, is serving detention I'm at home with incarceration Why should I get to count stars? An angry man needs attention. I watched you give freedom a C-section Behind black windowed bullet proof cars Mr. Man, is serving detention. A New-World-Order is in gestation Invented between their bogies, and pars. An angry man needs attention. A Vilanelle for your contemplation I refuse to rhyme those above with wars. Mr. Man, is serving detention. An angry man needs attention.

phoenixxx 13-Jun-03/2:48 PM
Wow, that's pretty bad. The poem makes an attempt at something important, but falls far short. In your comments, and your poem you lack syntax and proper grammar. Find a new hobby.




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