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Layne Staley's Sunglasses (Haiku) by Jeremi B. Handrinos

A son's curse searching to find a dead-end father That beats him to death

Robert K Foster 11-Jun-03/5:29 AM
Yu should almost never use the word "just". it is seldom necessary and it musddies up meaning bu softening the impact of your verb. perhaps "to" would be an apt replacement.




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