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Flies (Free verse) by Red_is_life

They are all flies, Buzzing and dancing All around me. I am disgusted by them. They land on me, I swat them away, using harsh Uncalled for comments. They go. Then continue in their attack, Using sympathetic lies, I can see it; they try to hide it all, Behind glassy eyes. I want to be alone. They dont understand. Now I am them, And they me, I try to attract their attention Desperate for them to see my Lonliness. They are disgusted by me; As I was with them. But they are not like me, They are not lonely. I am beyond their comprehension, They cant understand me. I want them to listen. I reach out but no hand comes, no Angel disguised. They'll never understand.

horus8 16-Jul-02/2:14 AM
Well.. I'll say this. it's good to be young. Take a deep breath. You're onto something. You wear your soul on your sleeve and your heart on your collar when you write. That takes guts and a love for what you're doing. With that going for you the hard part's over. Oh.. and as for the flies...get use to them cuz they never leave and they only get bigger.




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