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Fix it (Sonnet) by Nanshe

With objectification reserved for my fetish, Tiring of the need was the only salvo. When I first forayed into pain as a cure-- An accelerant with an seductive allure-- I needed it like a drug, although The thought of it made you squeamish. You gave me exactly what I wanted, Something you wouldn’t choose on your own-- Pushing boundaries of pain-shaped skin, You submitted and were made again. Hard to soft and flesh to bone You bore my harsh caresses undaunted. But partnering me became a chore That your dear flesh chose not to endure.

horus8 7-Apr-03/11:30 PM
that's a fucking aneurysm my friend, totally unfixable. however you did a wonderful job complicating an uncomplicated and ancient structure (sonnets) and that's got to count for something somewhere. and the unaccessability of the piece? also, right off the fucking charts. Great job.




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