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My Tomahawk goes up, UP, AND AWAY! (Villanelle) by Jeremi B. Handrinos

Bugs Bunny really loved Elmer Fudd. And after sex came the question. "Were there chemicals in your SCUD?" Can you guess my favorite soap sud? Yep, Mr. Bubbles is germ prevention. Bugs Bunny scrubbed after Elmer Fudd. I clicked on the war, and smoked some bud. Praying for a doritos manifestation. I then pondered sex with Ashley Judd. "Were there chemicals in your SCUD?" That line was late due to masturbation. No one really ever liked Elmer Fudd. With a stupid laugh, he was no stud. A stoned artist's twisted creation. "Were there chemicals in his SCUD?" Cucumbers on my eyes, I call for more mud. But my wait-staff are all in detention. I pray what's in my mouth just isn't cud. "Were there chemicals in your SCUD?"

OneFingerAnswer 21-Mar-03/2:21 AM
"Breakin the law! Breakin the law!" I think that it was interesting to see the breaking of the rules of the form but I'd like to see more substance and meaning to your stuff. No offence meant by that. You're great with images and mixing obscure and pop references into your works but when they come together I'm often left wondering why.

If murder were the penalty for bad poetry there would be no poets. Every poet writes a stinker once in a while. Or maybe twice.




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