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untitled (readjuster) (Free verse) by pomoxo

The readjuster's come to town; warmth collapses into my body. I've got a shivering grin for the evanescent sun that's flown in, dropped by for a quick stint. A joke it is I'm laughing behind my own composite, He's tweaking me back into the lucid rut where I love to glide and grudge; the tangible flow of yet-to-be-set concrete, flashes of a bridge I knew, a bridge I could have been poured into- But I'm static evaporating frenetic indentured to his land of mirage fields that conceal deleterious metal and dissolute strands of the dirt over which I once had command.

Jeremi B. Handrinos 20-Jan-03/8:36 PM
Deleterious aye? Metal you say? Command? I see. Very well. Good one. Nice ending

I feel if you were to structure it like this:

The re-adjuster's come to town;
warmth collapses into my body.
I've got a shivering grin for
the evanescent sun that's flown in,
dropped by for a quick stint.
A joke it is, I'm laughing
behind my own composite,
He's tweaking me back into
the lucid rut, where I love
to glide and grudge;
the tangible flow of
yet-to-be-set concrete,
flashes of a bridge I knew,
a bridge I could have been
poured into-But, I'm static, evaporating frenetic
indentured to his land
of mirage fields that conceal deleterious metal,
and dissolute strands
of the dirt over which
I once had command






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