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Skin, Bone, Flesh & Blood (Free verse) by scitz

I realize now, that I have achieved nothing that I set out to do. A part of you dies when you realize that love is no longer true. For I have felt love, Even though it only lasted a while, Its just such a loss, when memories of us are the only moment I can smile. Back then I never knew it, But I was so contented, Every barrier I had you went right through it, And every good trait of me, did not wait for me, to represent it. Now I feel lonely within this cage of bone and skin, I have tried every lie, every sin. You have moved on I have not, I still remember you, But you have forgot. I am skin, bone flesh and blood. With empty spaces within, all alone, skin, bone, flesh and blood, will sin the stones that were left for our good. I still grieve over you, and will to the end, For our love was true, but broken hearts do not mend. I became skin, bone, flesh and blood for loving you.

Jill Stockinger 27-Dec-20/4:15 PM
You move from "I" to "you" - I recommend keeping the same point of view throughout the whole poem. some poor lines: 'Every barrier I had, you went right through it"
_forcing lines that are not correct grammar just to get the rhyme is not useful: as in "you have forgot"-"will sin the stone". Hope this is useful.




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