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Worn Ruse (Free verse) by drnick

He'd like to touch you But you're not there. You're in a worn ruse He cannot see through. Silence guides in Thoughts, fears, lies. You will crush him A mind of depression. He'll contrive Your false mind And you'll do What you need to. Logic signs Pass him by Another worn ruse He will not see through.

amanda_dcosta 9-May-07/10:10 AM
Bravo. Some psychological problem from how I see it and very well put. I like the phrase... Logic signs pass him by. You could do with an edit , but I think from one point of view, you've already made your point. Good work.




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