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~* ATHENA *~ is a recipient of the poemWanker award:
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I Dig a Ponytail by Doris & Oats (Free verse) by w~* ATHENA *~w
Me, in plaid skirt, tights and mary janes Him, long hair, playing pool and laughing.. I said hey, man, what's a nice girl like you doing in a place like this? He blew me a kiss and said don't you miss.. I didn't. I guess it was right that night. i will never forget the thrill.... we sat in a wok on an icy hill and rode to our deaths or did we?

horus8 15-Sep-02/6:42 PM
maybe lose the, "or did we"? or bend the title to fit a little less crypticly? it's almost emotionaly unavailable...sorta self serving and perhaps a bit unique, but only to you...because it serves no purpose to the reader other than confusion...even if it makes all the sense in the world to you. to another its a bit neither here nor there.




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