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Brains for Barter (Free verse) by Dovina

I have no need to prove you wrong To show the triteness of your point No need to give the facts I’d rather find a joke you’ll like A memory pleasant on your mind I’d rather feel you grin Your breath falls warm upon my neck Your legs behind my chair feel strong Your lungs refresh the air I have the wind as if I’m running My wheels turn faster with each pun And slow with every pause How about a trade, my dear I’ll give you brains; you give me legs The hill is long and steep

wilco 12-Jan-07/7:38 PM
Your problem D, is that you write too much. I've come to believe that a poem every 2 days is too much. The people that are decent writers on here need to learn to edit themselves and not post everything we write becasue it ends up getting old and jumbled and we tend to repeat ourselves....Not that this is bad, but I bet you could write a really great thing if you saved up and all that.




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