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My secret to life (Free verse) by amanda_dcosta

We say that life is difficult, impossible to live ! If we just pause and view our hearts there's nothing we can give. We see the many broken homes and children in the streets with our own eyes we see the blind we see each others' grief. Sorrow fills our very lives With hardships, guilt and chains, Each one struggling to survive on his own strength his pain. It is not very easy to bye-pass the things we see; Yet we forcefully close the door of our hearts with lock and key. Many have come to show the way that each of us should live Yet, no where do we reach our goal unless Jesus walks right in. His life He lived by love alone Love was His only strength. By love he healed the deaf and dumb And all with worldly strain. His Love brought us our victory death could not keep Him bound with love He broke the chains that held us prisoners all around. He gave His crown of love's freedom To start our lives afresh To marvel in His radiance Bring out in us our best. So take a step to Jesus, To the glorious one enthroned And find your heart uplifted To step out fresh in love.

Ranger 25-Jun-06/11:40 AM
I don't know that I'll be able to come up with anything particularly useful at the moment. Am doing 54-hour weeks currently up to my elbows in butter, cheese, milk and yoghurts at my friendly local supermarket so I'm pretty exhausted and not really thinking straight. The intention was that I'd have some time for writing this summer, but that's yet to materialise.
I like the poem; in my opinion the rhyme scheme works nicely except for the last stanza (although the Queen's birthday celebrations are on the TV in the background; quite a distraction when trying to read poetry...) and as a devotional poem it's very good. But as I'm sure you're aware, due to the very nature of the poem, it'll get a mixed reaction. Those who agree with your beliefs will love it, those who disagree probably won't.
Umm...that's all I can think of right now. Maybe tomorrow morning will be a better time.
P.S. - One-nil to the Eng-er-land!




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