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Dashboard Jesus (Lyric) by wilco

She took a plane down to Charlotte to catch the moonlight in her eyes. and as the she crashed in to the darkness of the East Kentucky pines I read the note beside the coffee that said, “I’m hollow.” and signed “Goodbye, don’t follow”. I spent the night out in the suburbs drinking bourbon with her dad. I never told him of the note and those five words or how I’d never felt so bad. As the sun broke the horizon the night turned yellow, and he said, “God’s a funny fellow”. I took a car back down to Mobile Bay to get some sunshine on my skin. As the wheels caressed the highway with gravity wearing on my grin; the dashboard Jesus doesn’t help me once again Please come back. Without you here I’m hollow.

Edna Sweetlove 21-Jun-06/3:02 AM
A bit too location-specific for my taste. As a matter of interest why are so many Americans local town-specific, mentioning little towns no one else has heard of? Would you no be confused if I wrote a poem all about Tenterden or Woolwich Arsenal or Beckenham Junction? Surely it detracts from universality?




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