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The Bleeding Rose (Free verse) by BleedingRose

Petals confined by transparent wire. Roots embedded in the red soaked mire. Gasping for air, she twists and she turns. Old scars opened by self sharpened thorns. A blaze she does see in her darkest of nights. The fire of her dreams; such a bright burning light. And when the flames near, and then flicker and die, she watches them fade without wondering why. For her inner struggle has now changed its pace. Shes been robbed of her will. Such a long, hard race. Shes surrendered, and now, forgetting her needs, she will wait for the day she no longer bleeds.

amanda_dcosta 15-May-06/11:10 PM
Bleeding Rose, there are quite contridictory ideas coming through. MAybe , you should edit it to either a love mood or to a hate mood. By you mixing the two, we are not sure what you want to emphasise on. Being specific gives you additional points.

And I really wonder who this jerk is, going around giving a zero to all your poems. Maybe he needs a double dose of his own medicine.




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