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A Snap Shot (Free verse) by amanda_dcosta

The boat, brightly coloured, Fishing, Lay anchored and still. The distant horizon, A curtain of blue, No distinction between sea and sky. The white flaky clouds Radiated summer’s smile. The porpoises jumped gracefully, A song in their eyes and heart. The sun dived in For deeper blues and greens. The tide rose, and so did my heart. Picturesque, Captivating, Wonderstruck! I wanted time to stand still. And at that time I believe it did.

ALChemy 13-May-06/6:30 AM
Not your best. It's like a post card for the blind, like beauty that's just skin deep. It seems to give me nothing more than a pretty picture which I guess based on your title is what you were intending. I just know you are usually much deeper than that and those are the ones I prefer. But that's really just a matter of my own taste in poetry so take it with a grain of salt.




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