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A Snap Shot (Free verse) by amanda_dcosta

The boat, brightly coloured, Fishing, Lay anchored and still. The distant horizon, A curtain of blue, No distinction between sea and sky. The white flaky clouds Radiated summer’s smile. The porpoises jumped gracefully, A song in their eyes and heart. The sun dived in For deeper blues and greens. The tide rose, and so did my heart. Picturesque, Captivating, Wonderstruck! I wanted time to stand still. And at that time I believe it did.

amanda_dcosta 12-May-06/12:10 PM
Thanks Ranger. This is faster than I expected.

And the porpoises, well, it was their mood that I took note of. Maybe I should have given more thought to what they looked like. Thanks for the suggestion.

As for the use of 'the', I was merely being specific of what I took into account. Not just writing on anything at all. Well, this is just my opinion. Shall try to see how 'the' can be deleted, and where. Thanks Ranger.




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