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Good old days (Free verse) by amanda_dcosta

When she was little, a life carefree, She'd sing and dance in her home by the sea. She'd chase butterflies all day long, Singing 'Send me the pillow', her favourite song. She'd swing her arms above her head Go round in circles on the green turf. She remembers how happy she used to be In a world of her own. Gone are those days when she'd run wild and free Play I spy with friends or climb up a tree, Or jump from the branches, or slide down a wall If only she could relive it all. If only I could relive it all!

Ranger 7-Apr-06/12:03 AM
Well the thing with it is that we can tell it's you talking, on account of the pretty intimite detail you give. What you would achieve by keeping it entirely in the third person is a sense by which the reader can relate to it as well, and can apply their own experiences of childhood.
Am liking the look of the song; perfect glosa material, that!




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