Ranger6 Apr 2006

As with your last one, this leaves me longing for a little more description. The ideas are there but this is like a sketch when you want to see a watercolour.
I agree with Dovina about not changing the last line to first person; I'd also suggest losing the exclamation mark...they don't work as well in poetry as they do in prose.
You might want to give us an excerpt from 'Send me the pillow' as well, and use it as the basis for another stanza, maybe?
Very pleasant to read as it is, though.