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Because You Love Me (Lyric) by amanda_dcosta

It's waking hours. I walk aimlessly Wondering where my steps would lead me. When I hear your voice whisper to me That you love me. It's not aimless any more My steps progress And my day begins All because you say you love me. No matter what I do during the day No matter where I go; the road I take Hand in hand with you my love, You make my day, Because you love me.

Caducus 4-Apr-06/8:43 AM
Because this read so heartfelt and genuine it seemed elevated from greeting card style poetry to something more and i find myself drawn to the simplicity of it.

I guess I'm saying simplicity can work - i think the meter helps and it would be even better with a couple of killer lines (less basic). It needs a core, a heart.

The end line normally would make you sound dependant on someone else to feel loved but it kind of works for me though why do you love him? give us a reason and make the love tangible and felt more.

Pretty good, flawed yet lovely.




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