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Tulip (Free verse) by richa

The poor tulip boy has poor taste that he loves his patch and his trowel and spade and his landlord, the dame, that he sells to in the market his red and yellow flames. I am a poor tulip boy with not a purse nor a name made to grow tulips in clay and sleep in my shoes on a poor tulip boy wage happy, to sell none today.

amanda_dcosta 26-Mar-06/10:24 AM
I think your title could have been ' Tulip boy'....it's more focused on him. and line 8 could read ' with neither purse nor name'. This is pretty good and conveys a scene I remember from Mussoorie (India) at the base of the Himalayas, where I first saw tulips.... the red and yellow flames. Keep writing!




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