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Breakfast (Free verse) by Dhanesh M Kumar

Hip hip … hip….hurai, Hip hip … hip….hurai Powell, Rice and their company sings the song with seamless joy; Throwing apart the countless skulls of 2 years to 80 years , They are rejoiced by the smell of oil. Miles afar their boss is busy , Eating the breakfast of many Other’s bone..

amanda_dcosta 11-Mar-06/12:29 AM
Will have to agree with the rest. Last stanza needs fixing. I ain't a great fan of politics and war... but I think, in my opinion, you have painted quite a picture. Bones for breakfast!




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