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I'm there (Other) by amanda_dcosta

In the kettle of tenderness the rain sweeps God’s Spirit flows and blessings heap One’s heart now knows no sorrow. In the rainbow of laughter angels dance And move about in peaceful trance Love never sways nor falters. In the nursery of silence graces creep To fill the heart of the one who seeks For quiet restful waters. In the arms of love divine and pure There’s peace and joy; my life’s secure. I’m grazing in green pastures.

ALChemy 4-Feb-06/9:09 AM
Stanzas 2 and 4 are weaker and are more cliche than the other two. You should stay more with the nature theme in stanzas 2 and 4.
Change "graces creep to fill" to "graces creek fills". "Creep" is just a creepy word and doesn't quite fit in with the poem. Some really great lines in this poem though.




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