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Clouds (Free verse) by dancin_n_da_moonlite

You say my head is in the clouds. “Come back to earth, focus on what you are supposed to be doing.” “Concentrate on your job.” “Get your head out of the clouds." Maybe, Maybe I like the clouds. Maybe I want my head, in the clouds, Maybe my job is in the clouds. You. You all with your negativity; trying to force me out of my cloud. Maybe my job is to be your foil. Maybe my job is to find the silver lining in my clouds to give to you.

Alizarin_Crimson 25-Jan-06/8:19 AM
This sounds like somebody typed up the notes from a therapist's notepad. The only good part is the last stanza, because it posseses a modicum of originality...the rest is one inflated cliche.




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