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Better Off Dead (Lyric) by wilco

The paper-airplane smog hanging over my noose sent me into convulsions on the right side of youth. The recycled thoughts coming out of the clouds became movie-script endings and Indian mounds. And it came without warning and some broken bones a losing lottery ticket and reminders of home. Oh, but the winter chill sinks into my bones like Ebbot’s Pond absorbing stones that we’ve thrown. And she rains when her eyes cloud up and she’s saved from how life ends up when you’re all alone. Cigarette smoking in a hundred degrees and a leper sees your heart says “it’s still a disease”. Take away the romance in the end of your days, it’s just a long holiday at the bottom of Fire Lake. So, I’ll wait for the engine to turn off all the lights, become a secondary character and fade out of sight. Oh, but the winter chill sinks into my bones like Ebbot’s Pond absorbing stones that we’ve thrown. And she rains when her eyes cloud up and she’s saved from how life ends up when you’re all alone.

zodiac 9-Dec-05/12:57 AM
Boys, boys. There's an easy way to solve this whole problem.

cyan9 - your average original poem comment is no more helpful or interesting than wilco's. Usually it's just a general (mostly negative) impression with some positive comment on a detail you liked. That is, nothing any serious poet can take to the bank. You probably comment like this because you realize poemranker isn't serious poetry and besides you have better things to do. Don't get me wrong, I'm extremely happy to have you here, but if you're going to hold other users to a high standard, I'd say put up or shut up.

Both you & wilco - it's hard enough to get someone on poemranker to read your poems, much less to offer any comment at all, useful or not. I'm glad enough both of you actually do this, and in truth you're two of the current best things about the site. I'm not saying we couldn't all use improvement, but let's be happy about what we got, right? I mean it's Christmas, right?

Oh, PS - let's all agree not to delete anybody's comments from our own poems. What, are you afraid someone's going to think your poem's good until they read some other user trashing it? That's just silly.




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