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FIVE LOAVES AND TWO FISH (Free verse) by amanda_dcosta

They heard His voice - they followed Him Into the desert their hearts to trim Till to the extreme point of hunger They discern His holy will. The plan to send the crowd away Before the night – the end of day They never could, nor understood On what the Master had to say. His holy will He made them know Not until fed He’d let them go, Food was scarce for the crowd so big It was just five loaves and two fish. Then He thanked and praised His Dad For the little food they had And they passed it all around To the crowd who were so glad. A balance of twelve baskets full Was gathered at the close of meal. They marveled at the wondrous way The impossible became real. It is all but plain to see Jesus comes to set us free If we just lean on Him and know How His love in us can grow. Give to all who gather near In Jesus name – with a heart of cheer And then blessings will grow and grow A real twelve baskets full and more.

zodiac 7-Dec-05/12:38 AM
Religiously and metaphorically, yes. But, from a literary standpoint, a metaphor needs to work in the literal sense before you can worry about making it work in the metaphorical sense. Consider comparisons like

"He was intolerably stupid, Alex Trebek with a better moustache",
or
"his hands so tenderly caressing the piano keys were miniature David Beckhams sprinting across the cricket pitch".

Sure, the guy's stupid, and sure someone playing well is like David Beckham, but the metaphors fall apart, because Alex Trebek isn't stupid and has a great moustache, or because David Beckham is a good soccer player, not a good cricketer.

I'm not disputing your actual meaning, which is a good one. But if you have to get a Christian message across by changing the literal events in the Bible -well, that can't happen, can it?

Cheers
-zodiac




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