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Another Chapter (Free verse) by TLRufener

An empty page in an unfinished book Wanting to see but to afraid to look Unwritten words scared to be seen Undone deeds between you and me Another chapter forever untold No more love, no more hand to hold Secrets unspoken when they need to be said One more thought to fill up my head Another chapter I will never write No more reasons to keep on the light With one last chance for us to try You turn from me and say goodbye

wilco 4-Dec-05/1:23 PM
Alright, lookit...you've got to get it out of your head that you have to rhyme to make a poem work. You're putting stuff in here just to make it rhyme. You could say this exact same thing with three lines and it would sound more poetic.

It's not just horrible bad, but it's just not good either. It doesn't hold my attention, it doesn't make me think, and it doesn't make me think "yeah..I know what she's feeling...I've felt that way".





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