Bachus2 Sep 2002

i expect better from you young man...fix the capital problem a whisper is always heard before a shout and it's not at all stylish...but if you did something like.....when my water runs......[i crawl swear] the crop that..........[cranium sigh]there is no healt......[cataract clear] you know what i mean? be more creative with your() and<> and ``~~~~~''//// trust me it's much more effective than just shouting...and also look up an ode...i hardly would consider this a royal point to be made...it's definitely lyric....for a run down on style buzzez check out horus8's last 5 or six poems and also nentwined does some style flaring contrasts occasional and there are quite a few others, but you'll see it when you see it, and this is only 50% there...i could whip this bastard into shape in ten minutes if i was your editor...shame realy...let me know...i might be able to get you in on my calander...let me know. carry on.h