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Hunger (Free verse) by Dovina

(Imagine a single line of text in a circle that you have to turn as you read - the word “Hunger” at the center. You can’t determine where to start, so start reading anywhere.) I am hungry You present me a plate of food Sensations arise I see food, smell it, anticipate eating it Volition comes into use I pick up utensils I indulge in the pleasure of eating As my stomach fills, desire decreases My mind turns to other desires New sensations Mental formulations arise

Stephen Robins 28-Feb-05/5:22 AM
If the simple idea it seeks to achieve is the feeling of having voided in ones brand new tweed trousers on the glorious 12th whilst standing next to the Marquess of Littlehampton then you have pitched it brilliantly. If, however, your simple idea is the idea of a revolving table of food like some form of deranged assortment of victuals which perpetuate the constant desire to keep on eating then you are a fat whale.




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