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Rain (Free verse) by dancin_n_da_moonlite

"Do you want to go outside Katie?" "But it's raining, Davey." "But do you want to go outside Katie?" "Okay Davey." "Do you feel the rain Katie?" "Why wouldn't I Davey? " "But do you feel the rain Katie?" "Not really, Davey." "Do you know why it rains Katie?' "Well they taught us in science Davey." "But do you know why it rains Katie?" "I guess not, Davey." "Do you want to stay out here forever, Katie?" "I have things to do, Davey." "But do you want to stay out here forever Katie?" "Yes, I really do, Davey."

Blindpoetry 15-Jan-05/7:36 PM
then again. Now that I actually thought about it.
This style is sort of bad. I mean. Good for like. two stanza's ...and then use something different from then on, after the two stanza's...

Because you can basically PREDICT what Davey's going to say.
And that's just boring as hell.




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