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Walk The Boy To Circles (Villanelle) by horus8

Around the rug, I walk the boy The kitchen slants, the faucet drips Circles have never been so coy It's not a system, or some ploy This need to warm up his blue lips Around the rug, I walk the boy While the war outside may destroy My need to rock him to sleep, perhaps Circles have never been so coy My words, my love, are a poet's decoy To save the child that my mind whips Around the rug, I walk the boy. As sirens wail, and bombs deploy The mother slips out with a swish of hips Circles have never been so coy A young father with no milk, no joy In doing these laps, making these trips Around the rug, I walk the boy Circles have never been so coy.

horus8 22-Dec-04/11:42 PM
What's classy? Just curious...
Raping haikus with your puberty
doused ideas about what poetry
Means to a 17 year old?
Perhaps, straddling over
the mouth of Freeverse
And pinching a loaf of love?
Please, take your mediocrity
to the showers. Everyone knows
A villanelle is a purposely forced
Rhyming couplet, that's the point
You tit. My extremely DEEP poem
happens to have DEEPER meanings
Like Sodomy, war, and biscuits.

Good Evening,

Sincerely,

-=Horus8_Of_The_Eights=-




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