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Walk The Boy To Circles (Villanelle) by horus8

Around the rug, I walk the boy The kitchen slants, the faucet drips Circles have never been so coy It's not a system, or some ploy This need to warm up his blue lips Around the rug, I walk the boy While the war outside may destroy My need to rock him to sleep, perhaps Circles have never been so coy My words, my love, are a poet's decoy To save the child that my mind whips Around the rug, I walk the boy. As sirens wail, and bombs deploy The mother slips out with a swish of hips Circles have never been so coy A young father with no milk, no joy In doing these laps, making these trips Around the rug, I walk the boy Circles have never been so coy.

Bhaskaryya 22-Dec-04/3:24 AM
So did you visit my poems to analyse it and give a honest comment or just take out your spite coz' I said your poem isn't classy?? Do read my profile, I never claimed to write well. I know my poetry sucks. Besides, English is NOT my language and I am just 17. I just told you what I felt about your poem, I didn't take out any personal grudges. I am open to criticism but it should be done in a positive way, not insulted.




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