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What is that I seek again? (Free verse) by Bhaskaryya

Bent upon by fifty and score, Holding onto memories up till graceful gray, Another season flower for my sweetheart, Along another tear rested upon her grave. A rusted helmet drawn from the oubliette And a brown old overcoat that shelters, More reminiscences than cobwebs; Mounted upon an old nag, Now a terrible excuse for once a fiery beast I set out; very much like a quixotic knight. Uncertain of what track must I gallop, Whether it’s the auburn hills or the green plain. Still struggling within myself for an answer- What is it that I seek again? A last backward glance cast upon The sorry house that once cradled love, A farewell tear cascaded upon The garden that once cradled innocence. An yester picture embedded in my heart, I set out; led by my trusted old friends; The narrow winding country lane, And the tenderness of the wistful zephyr. Expounding over unseen horizons, Treading upon the path to solitude. And amidst this lonely impulse I find escape from the numbing sense of pain. Here, I think I’ve found my answer- What is it that I seek again?

horus8 22-Dec-04/1:16 AM
A cliche homerun of shit.
Talk about forced rhyme?
What about forced plain old
Bad droll writing? This
Is a plate full of nut sack.




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