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Ash (Lyric) by horus8

There is a place, I often go A burnt down house, outside of town Ring of trees, scarred and bent Laughing children, now absent Foundation left like bones for rain Nothing earned, and nothing gained Mailbox tilted to face the ground The far off bark of a Blood-hound An Ash tree, initialed, full of crows My heart, and hers, black with arrow.

Imago 28-Oct-04/10:24 PM
Seems the poem is a metaphor for something lost.
If so here's my solution.
Do not the burning embers dwindle
In the light of thier own lives
(Yet)the oldest flames may still rekindle
This is how love survives

Let tragedy bind a family.

I give you an 8 'cause I don't get the "bone for rain" thing.




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