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Rapid Eye Movement (Free verse) by wilco

Harsh words and strained voices aside, there will be no pain in the eventual cease-fire of sleep. Nothing makes the night seem lonely like the soft fluttering in her shuttered eyes. In color schemes of shadow black her silhouette groans and turns and returns to silent slumber.

nentwined 27-Aug-04/2:49 PM
I think the title is too ... blatant ... for the rest of the poem. The poem is very nice. Agree with the semi-awkwardness of "nothing makes the night seem lonely like". Maybe just "nothing makes the night more lonely than"? Thoughts.




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