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I MISS YOU (Lyric) by jroday

My mother has past, and I'm all alone. I had only one, and now she's gone. I'll always remember that dark December day. For that's the day she went away. The days are long without her hear. Being an onlychild is not so bad. But losing your mother can be oh so sad. I know you've gone were peacewaters flow. There be no more aches and on more pains. There wont even be me driving you insane. I'll always remember the words you use to say. I might be dead and gone. But waite till you get kids of your own. Life's rough without you here. I can't get that advice I use too hear. Life goes on you use to say. You can only live day by day. Have faith my son in the Lord above. He'll watch over you with a mother's love

wilco 18-May-04/12:24 PM
First, I think that you definitely need to get some more experience before you write something like this. It's a good sentiment but you're ruining it with your lack of style and understanding of how to write. Take the advice of SupremeDreamer.




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